AW 7

Chapter seven of AW focuses on how writing in the humanities is conceived. The structure of the writing style consists of a thesis, which is the introduction of the text. It shows a clear central idea of the text, which will be built off of it in the rest of the text. Beyond the thesis, the body paragraphs often start with a topic sentence telling the reader what information is within this paragraph. It is then finished with a transition sentence linking it to the following body paragraph. Language should avoid being passive and should use human emotion. These aspects contribute human-like elements, so your writing can come across as more expressive. The writing styles for the humanities include MLA and Chicago.

For the example essay given within chapter seven, I find the introduction to help explain the background and what beliefs and society were like when this essay was written; however, I feel the thesis is overly complicated for no explicit reason, using just the sentence “Chopin explores marriage as the oppression of one’s true self and desires.” would be a much easier thesis for the reader to grasp. The overall structure is well done with a clear hook at the beginning into the background of the time, finally building a thesis. The language used in this introduction is very on-point, engaging, and somewhat concise on the topic of the essay. Reference in the opening paragraph includes properly citing the text the author is using. They also include names of other famous writers writing around the same time.

The body paragraphs are the meat of this essay and contain evidence to support the author’s claims. This essay would be better represented under headers rather than just paragraphs but to the formatting. Many paragraphs often are written about the same section of text. The topic is introduced in one paragraph, and in the following, certain aspects of the text are explored for how they build the story’s meaning. Besides this structure issue, the rest of the formatting is fine. Each paragraph includes a topic sentence, followed by drawing meaning from the text and analyzing it, then is tied back to the thesis. The author often goes down the path of summarizing the text without linking it to their thesis. The language is the standard for this style of writing and has no major flaws. Quotes are abundant in this paper, and the author does them correctly by naming the story’s author once with the paragraph number, then only including the paragraph for the rest of their citations. 

In their concluding paragraph, the thesis is retouched, and key points of the text are used to provide final proof of the author’s claim. A final meaning is also drawn from the text, which wraps up the paper.



 

 
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Breaks and Bonds

While reading Freshman Year Sarah seemed so unaware of the time she had to choose classes and totally missed her assigned date for registration.I however have been feeling a mix of anxiety and eagerness for choosing my upcoming classes. Although the day to register for classes is November first I have already been browsing through Degreeworks looking for the classes that seem interesting, satisfy requirements for my degree, are Civitae classes, and have good reviews. Even after finding such classes, there is still always the possibility they fill up before I even get the chance to register. Upon meeting with her advisor Sarah is confused as she was expecting someone else. Unlike Sarah I am very aware of who my advisor is. He one of my Professors and I have a fairly strong bond with him and go to him often for help.

I have come to form bonds with my peers here at Longwood as-well. Upon returning from break, I also hung out with a few of my friends, much like Sarah had. My friends and I had dinner at D-hall on the day we came back. Although our break was much shorter than Sarah’s I was still glad to see my friends and be back at college. As I become better friends with the people I’ve met at Longwood I have become more distant with the friends I had made in my earlier years. I feel I have made genuine friendships here at Longwood and am grateful for them, so I am not to saddened my losing old ones.

    Another thing I am grateful for is the upcoming Thanksgiving and fall breaks. I am very excited to get a longer time to be home and spend time with family. This winter break I am going on a trip to New York for Christmas so I am very excited and can’t wait. Going back for fall break made me realize just how much I really love my family and what I’m missing when I’m away at college. I am also worried being on break for a month might knock me out of the flow of college and I will have to reacclimate after the breaks. It should be easier than getting used to college when first arriving so I’m sure I can handle it.



 
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Tyler Weiss, Who Will You Be in Four Years? (Blog Post due, Thursday, Sept 5th, Groups 1 & 3)

Dear, Tyler Weiss

I hope you are doing well during your time at Longwood University and I hope you’ve accomplished all the goals we’ve set for ourselves. As I am writing this letter after just starting my freshman year I am filled with excitement and determination. I know that these next few years will be challenging for you, but I also know that they will be incredibly rewarding for you. There are a few goals that I’ve set for you that I want to make sure you stay focused on, so I am writing this letter to remind you on what is important.

First, I am committed to succeeding in ROTC. I know this program will push you to your limits but I determined to complete this and it is something that I am passionate about. I want to develop good leadership skills and discipline and that will help me not just in the military but also in civilian life. I hope that by the time you read this you have grown both physically and mentally and have taken on leadership roles within ROTC.

Second, Getting good grades is a priority. College is a time to learn and grow mentally and I want you to make the most of every class I take. It is going to take hard work and you will need to focus and there will be many late nights but I am determined that you will excel and sacrifices like that must be made in order to succeed. I hope that you’ve stayed organized and have managed your time well, and I hope you take some time to look back at where you started and to know that you gave your best efforts in every course.

Finally, As a History major, I want to take a dive deep into my studies and truly understand the intricacies of the past. History is more than just memorizing dates and events, it’s about understanding the forces that have shaped the world that we live in today. I hope that you’ve had the opportunities to engage with your professors and have participated in class discussions, and maybe even contribute some original research towards the field. I want you to be proud of yourself and the History Major you will become.

I know that there will be times where things are tough and the goals that I have set might seem to feel out of reach. But you need to remember why you started. Remember the passion and drive that you possess and how it is going to fuel your way to success. Keep pushing forward and don’t be afraid to ask for help when you need it. I believe in you, and I am excited to see all you strive to become.

Sincerely,

Tyler Weiss

 

 
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